Sunday, August 14, 2011

OP12. Rub does not rhyme with tug!

All day I was stooping and bending
Then went to the spa for some mending
The masseuse was no lady
Her methods quite shady
So my story has a very happy ending.

3 comments:

  1. I like the "story" and the wordplay in your title. Meter needs some work, though. You get **.

    The last two lines flow better if written
    Her methods were shady
    My tale has a quite happy ending.

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  2. Yes, I prefer your alternate "ending"

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