Monday, January 28, 2013

OP73. A heavenly body

There was an astronomer, Frink
Who one day had fun with his dink
He inserted his pole
Into a black hole
But inside that black hole, it was pink.

2 comments:

  1. Another great story line and title, David! But I wonder if Frink the Astronomer ever said to the black hole, "Whitney Houston, we have a problem."

    If I may offer a suggestion, I am having trouble reciting your fifth line which appears to have one too many syllables in it. Are you wanting it ACCENTED like this:

    "But on the INside that BLACK hole was PINK."?

    Would it still maintain your intent if it were to read this way:

    "But inSIDE that black HOLE, it was PINK."?

    (Hey, don't blame me, David. My spinster aunt and Commandant of Poetic Licensure, Anna Pest, told me to write to you and be a pest.)

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  2. Actually, I think that's a good suggestion. I wondered myself if it was too many. I'll edit it now.

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