Sunday, December 18, 2011

431. Groin pains

A man lied to his wife, fed her phonies,
Then sneaked out each day, played the ponies.
One day she found out,
Grabbed him by his large snout
And then kicked him hard in the cojones.

2 comments:

  1. WTF!! I wrote a comment on this earlier today and thought I had been "published". Maybe I was deleted by the author for daring to suggest an improvement. It is this: Line 4 has too many syllables (IMHO) and doesn't flow well. How about: "Then grabbed his large snout". If starting two lines with "when" is objectionable, then maybe "thence"...

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  2. Woops. I forgot to say that I really liked it in spite of my suggested change. Very funny..

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